Comm Bus 3.5 Rewrite Letter (no broken english)

Origin" rel="nofollow">inal Letter is attached Go to page 183 in" rel="nofollow">in the textbook. Startin" rel="nofollow">ing in" rel="nofollow">in the middle of the page is a letter written by Jenny to Stephanie. Your assignment is to rewrite this letter to improve the document's readability. Write a two page paper, rewritin" rel="nofollow">ing Jenny's letter. Jenny's origin" rel="nofollow">inal letter is 442 words in" rel="nofollow">in length. Demonstrate clear, in" rel="nofollow">insightful thin" rel="nofollow">inkin" rel="nofollow">ing while in" rel="nofollow">incorporatin" rel="nofollow">ing the followin" rel="nofollow">ing topics in" rel="nofollow">into your paper: Ensure that the message is easy to read and effectively highlights Jenny's potential for ownin" rel="nofollow">ing and runnin" rel="nofollow">ing a Sunrise franchise. Be sure to improve the ease of readin" rel="nofollow">ing usin" rel="nofollow">ing the prin" rel="nofollow">inciples of completeness, conciseness, and natural style discussed in" rel="nofollow">in the chapter. ORIGINAL LETTER Dear Stephanie, It was an honor to meet you at the Flower Exhibition. It is with great in" rel="nofollow">interest that I write this letter to describe my genuin" rel="nofollow">ine hopes to be a franchisee. There are many reasons why I am in" rel="nofollow">interested in" rel="nofollow">in this opportunity, and there are many reasons why I am qualified to be a franchisee for you. I have been in" rel="nofollow">in the flower in" rel="nofollow">industry for over twelve years in" rel="nofollow">in various capacities such as startin" rel="nofollow">ing as a flower deliverer, then I acted as a flower arranger, and fin" rel="nofollow">inally for the last eight years I was the shop manager for a flower shop in" rel="nofollow">in the mall. In my time as a shop manager, I was told by the shop owner and dozens of employees that I was the right person to lead the shop and that sales were higher at my location than any other shop in" rel="nofollow">in that chain" rel="nofollow">in (which has 18 shops at malls in" rel="nofollow">in my state and the three surroundin" rel="nofollow">ing states). In fact, sales at my shop have in" rel="nofollow">increased every quarter that I have been the shop manager with the exception of just two quarters in" rel="nofollow">in the eight years of my stewardship. I am very proactive in" rel="nofollow">in my approach to sales and thin" rel="nofollow">ink that my approach of keepin" rel="nofollow">ing repeat customers happy is the key to success at my shop and which I seek to contin" rel="nofollow">inue as a franchisee. I have used so many marketin" rel="nofollow">ing techniques to gain" rel="nofollow">in our customers' attention. Such as, I have created a Facebook group and I send specials to the people in" rel="nofollow">in that group. Not to mention I send targeted coupons by mail and email that are sent to the customers with specific types of in" rel="nofollow">interests. There is no substitute for knowin" rel="nofollow">ing your customers. I also do many great special events at seasonal periods and have won prizes for flower arrangements many times that brin" rel="nofollow">ing the shop good press. My flower arrangements were even featured in" rel="nofollow">in some TV commercials for the flower shops across our region. There are not any Sunrise stores near here and I believe from the bottom of my heart that this is the right time to in" rel="nofollow">invest in" rel="nofollow">in this area. I know without any doubt that you will be impressed with my work ethic and my focus on the customer. Needless to say, the customer is kin" rel="nofollow">ing, and we need to treat them that way. I am capable of meetin" rel="nofollow">ing all of the fin" rel="nofollow">inancial obligations. Thank you and hope to hear from you soon. Most of all, is I love people, and if you are carin" rel="nofollow">ing for your customers, you will achieve your goals and reach the pin" rel="nofollow">innacle of success. Regards, Jenny