Description
Here is some general feedback that can help make your essay stronger.
1) Good hook. You got the reader interested with a nice intro. Make sure that you summarizes what the book is about and also have a clear thesis statement. Also make sure that you define any terms that you will be talking about in the book. (Link to How Thesis can be Formatted https://bit.ly/2lNJWpH).
2) Your topic sentence for the first body paragraph is worded oddly. Reword it so that it is more clear. Aside from that, analysis is fine but there are couple of places where you want to reword your sentences. Read the aloud and see if they make sense grammatically.
3) Same issue in body paragraph 2. The topic sentence is a run on and is very hard to understand the first time reading it. Read it aloud to yourself and reword it so that the reader does not have to do a second take.
4) For the third paragraph, make sure to read everything aloud and reword your points.
5) Elaborate on your first analysis for the quote in the fourth body paragraph.
6) Summarize your thesis and elaborate on the points as well.
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