Researched Argument Essay revision

Researched Argument Essay revision Order Description I will attach my essay with professor's comments. Please correct my mistakes and add more paragraphs. You will see comments where to add paragraphs. I will also upload the same essay without comments, so it will be easier to correct and add in" rel="nofollow">information there. Thank you very much. If you don't understand the task, write a message to me. Instructions: Your fin" rel="nofollow">inal draft of your Researched Argument should be a careful revision of your earlier draft. Your fin" rel="nofollow">inal draft should reflect your best effort on this assignment. You have thought about and written about your ideas in" rel="nofollow">in multiple assignments. Your fin" rel="nofollow">inal draft should be the culmin" rel="nofollow">ination of all your previous work and in" rel="nofollow">include substantial revision. Your revision should be more than just editin" rel="nofollow">ing of comments. Revision may in" rel="nofollow">include ADDING, DELETING or REORDERING entire paragraphs, addin" rel="nofollow">ing STRONGER EVIDENCE, or in" rel="nofollow">includin" rel="nofollow">ing a visual argument. The fin" rel="nofollow">inal draft should show significant changes and/or improvements to the first graded draft. Assignments which do not meet the min" rel="nofollow">inimum requirements may be returned without bein" rel="nofollow">ing graded. Plagiarism or improper/lack of citation of source material may result in" rel="nofollow">in failure of the assignment. Be sure to in" rel="nofollow">include the headin" rel="nofollow">ing with your name, the title of the assignment and label it Fin" rel="nofollow">inal Draft. In this assignment you must demonstrate that you have implemented a research plan; used a rhetorically effective method of organization; formulated, developed and supported a thesis usin" rel="nofollow">ing sound evidence, reasonin" rel="nofollow">ing and appropriate appeals; and in" rel="nofollow">incorporated alternate positions in" rel="nofollow">into a sustain" rel="nofollow">ined argument.